Chapter 5.
Utter Preposterous
Oh that did it! Because of repulsive Jack Merridew , I now only have one eye! And what pains me the most is when Ralph does nothing at all. Man if my asthma and overweightness and silly nickname was way out of the picture I would do something about it. Really! I also have bad dreams like the littluns. But not exactly the same kind. There's is about being attacked by trees and such and mine is about Jack. What if Ralph gives up on being leader and Jack takes over. I already know what's gonna happen to me because it is crystal clear that he shows no care what so ever for me. And I know he internally feels the same way for Ralph because it's that determined-to-violence look in his irises that is unclouded in every way.
Sigh. And as the bright sun reaches it's highest goal in the perfect blue, we are still beached out on this tropical Island. The same old same old. Ralph and Simon build huts, Jack and his fearful copy caters go killing crazily, and I sit all day and keep a critical eye on the littluns.
But, but, it's not fair! Not at all! We just possibly have to end up in some Jungle Paradise, with no adults, and the worst thing that happens to us is Jacks arrival! I really do believe Ralph is an good leader but he doesn't have all of the tools. He can do more things than any other boy I have ever met, but one thing he can be stubborn and let loose of his guard. When ever I try to recall what's best he doesn't even see me. And plus, when you are stuck on an unfamiliar Island with a bunch of naughty boys and one crazed boy with death flaming in his eyes, it's stupid to let your guard down. You have to be there to set things straight so that they won't loose them self's. With out guidance, they will grow wild. And slowly, I can see it unfolding.
Sunday, September 21, 2008
Blog #4
Posted by bethany s. at 8:32 PM
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3 comments:
Hey Bethany,
I love your tittle, It is so fun to say! (Ha! Ha!)
I also like how you started with Piggy being so mad, like " Oh, that Jack Merridew!" You could really see that Piggy has had it, he id done with Jack. You did I good job of showing what Piggy was feeling. I know you could right a lot more, and what about the vocabulary words! Also again, I love how you use kind of a little bit of poetry in it. I hope you know what I am talking about, because you do and it is making your writing fantastic. Bets part, the ending. I love how your ending comes to a slow end I can totally picture, "With out guidance, they will grow wild. And slowly, I can see it unfolding." I love it ! Keep writing like this, I love it.
HAILEIGH SMITH
Bethany,
Where are the vocabulary words lady??
the way that you put your self in the character was so good that i laughed! i couldn't believe that Piggy didn't write this himself! it was amazing! you blew me away with this. it should be a little longer next time though so be careful. i think it was besides that and the vocab, make sure to highlight it as well.
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